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with every hug and handshake
and every i'm sorry for your loss
i wait to fall apart
to fall asleep
to dream of your drowning

to wake up sharp and shivering
like the shards of bitter cold
that impaled the final seconds
before your eyes fell closed

i want to believe that you closed your eyes

every time i close mine here
and breathe this chill air
i wait to feel the pressure in my chest

i will always half expect
to encounter you washed ashore somewhere
bloated and blue and no longer lost

but still there are no tears
no swell
no rush
no water
and no more salt for these wounds
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Full title: If it had been hypothermia, your body would have floated

My father worked on boats for most of his life.
My childhood memories are punctuated by stories
of people lost at sea, images of funerals I never
attended, ghosts of strangers wandering on beaches.






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Mischx Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2014
chilling. Every word is exactly what it should have been. 
Your writing is simply a delight to read
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RockstarVanity Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014
Thank you :tighthug:
This has exited in draft form on my hard drive for over a year now and I only just felt like it had reached a point where it was finished and shareable.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
"i want to believe that you closed your eyes"

oomph! what a subtle wrenching of the guts there. :+fav:
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RockstarVanity Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
I've always been intrigued by this idea that drowning is somehow peaceful and a long time ago became convinced that people just said that to comfort themselves.
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MachinesBleedToo Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
spooky and vivid imagery 
the sea sure is a dangerous place :c
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RockstarVanity Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
When my dad used to tell me about people he knew who had died at sea, the stories almost always ended with very practical information about avoiding such disasters. The experience would take the form of me creating films in my head to accompany the descriptions of tragedy, abruptly interrupted by something like "But they didn't have any fucking life jackets and they shouldn't have been out in that weather without a working radio anyway".
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MachinesBleedToo Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
LOL- so bleak, I love it. 
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Memnalar Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014
I'm happy that you do this. Your poetic license is well-granted.
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RockstarVanity Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2014
Thank you :hug: I'm getting braver about sharing my writing and it means a lot when people take the time to say something about it.
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Memnalar Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
Writing is two-thirds bravery, I think. Give it hell.
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